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Megs
10-24-2000, 01:40 PM
My life, in short, is done
<br>I lived it fully and completely.
<br>I tell you now, have some fun,
<br>Don't always live so neatly.
<br>My life, in short, is done,
<br>I have fullfilled my dreams.
<br>Live to know you won,
<br>Live for you not teams.
<br>My life, in short, is done.
<br>I have done everything I wished
<br>Live your life in the sun
<br>Live your life to be missed
<br>My life, in short, is done
<br>Don't feel sorrow
<br>That I am gone
<br>Live for tomorrow.
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<br>This needs a lot of work. I don't know I was sad and it came out but It's not the greatest. Hey I'm only 16.
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<br>Megs :)N

major tom
10-24-2000, 02:50 PM
Megs
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<br>It is sad but it is also beautiful. :) I'd love to see more of it. :)
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<br>KirstyN

Megs
10-25-2000, 02:59 AM
Thank you. I love knowing what other people think of my poetry. :)
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<br>MegsN

littlebit
10-25-2000, 07:33 AM
Megs,
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<br>Absoultely beautiful! :)
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<br>deAnnalynnN

Megs
10-25-2000, 10:51 AM
Thank you DeAnnalynn! It really means a lot to me. :)N

major tom
10-25-2000, 01:51 PM
Megs
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<br>Are you going to add more lines to your poem? To make it not so sad you could expand on the things that have made the life "full and complete". :) Just a suggestion but it is great as is anyway. :)
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<br>KirstyN

Pilgrim
10-25-2000, 03:06 PM
very good, but also very sad.
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<br>Thanks for sharing:):)
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<br>BrianN

Megs
10-26-2000, 02:58 AM
I might. I haven't had time or really much inspiration lately. So, I don't know. Maybe?
<br>Thank you Brian. I'm glad you all liked it. You are right tho, it is sad. Must have had one of those days.
<br>MegsN

MDgarthgirl
11-01-2000, 12:26 PM
Nice job, Megs. :)
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<br>If the purpose was to evoke sympathy due to sadness, it worked. I like it.
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<br>Sorry for the reply-come-lately...just haven't been able to get around here much.
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<br>NashN

Megs
11-02-2000, 01:48 AM
Thanks nash! You're right that was the purpose!
<br>MegsN