This one might take a second take to get it....but maybe not

[MDgarthgirl]

Hey y'all. I wrote this one last night cuz I've had this idea of personifying a "second chance." (I'm also fighting a cold off and since I can't sing as well as usual, I figured I could practice my other...talent, I guess you could call it.)
<br>My first feedback for this one had a hard time understanding the last part. So, please don't take this as an insult to your intelligence, but I thought I might explain something. I'm "asking" my second chance to help fix the relationship I ruined. The second chance fixes it, and I tell the second chance that I can never repay "him" for it the next time we meet. And because the second chance fixed it, I get to realize that this relationship is meant to be and so I get to "meet" my destiny, hence the last line of the song. Capishe? lol And, if this helps, I hear it as a soulful, country waltz. Any feedback you wish to give is always appreciated.
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<br>Hello, Second Chance
<br>© 2000 Stephanie Shade
<br>
<br>How long has it been
<br>since I’ve seen you?
<br>You’ve had a habit of hiding from me
<br>I never thought
<br>I would be so glad
<br>to watch you walk into reach
<br>
<br>Hello, Second Chance
<br>I’m so glad you decided to show
<br>I’ve been waiting patiently for you
<br>I hope you’re not in a hurry to go
<br>
<br>I’m afraid I need
<br>a favor
<br>For a man that’s broken inside
<br>You see, I wasn’t supposed
<br>to hurt him
<br>But I was blinded by my foolish pride
<br>
<br>Could you please ask
<br>the hands of time
<br>to untie the knots I’ve made
<br>And let me back
<br>into the heart
<br>I never meant to break
<br>
<br>(instrumental break)
<br>
<br>Hello, Second Chance
<br>So glad you decided to show
<br>I’m afraid I can never repay you
<br>And how you did it, I’ll never know
<br>
<br>But, I noticed you’re not alone
<br>You brought your friend, I see
<br>It’s a pleasure to finally meet you
<br>Hello…Destiny
<br>
<br>"Thanks for your time,"
<br>NashN

[Hawk7lte]

So you personified traits "second chance" and "destiny" to make a relationship that was meant to be to continue happily.
<br>
<br>Clever.
<br>
<br>Hope you're cold is getting better too.
<br>
<br>HawkN

[Paula]

Hey, Stephanie, I like this one a lot!:cool:
<br>
<br>PaulaN

[Pilgrim]

Great song again again Steph:):)
<br>
<br>I like it a lot:)
<br>
<br>No news from here yet:(
<br>
<br>BrianN

[major tom]

Love the song especially this verse:
<br>
<br>Could you please ask
<br>the hands of time
<br>to untie the knots I’ve made
<br>And let me back
<br>into the heart
<br>I never meant to break
<br>
<br>:) :)
<br>
<br>Kirsty
<br>
<br>N

[MDgarthgirl]

Thanks for the kind words, y'all. Sorry I haven't replied in a while, REAL busy lately.
<br>
<br>You hit it right on the head, Hawk! And thanks for the well wishes, my cold is better. I think it's turned into allergies now, lol.
<br>
<br>Don't fret, Brian. Like I said, I doubt they'll even take a look at it since they're searching for finished songs. And who knows how many they go wade through in a day. I'm still in your debt for trying, though. Thanks!
<br>
<br>Take Care,
<br>NashN

[littlebit]

i got right away. WOW, that has got my heart reeling, Stephanie. You really got a way with words, girl. Very cool song. Hope your cold is better.
<br>
<br>overwhelmed
<br>
<br>deAnnalynnN

[GarthLVR88]

Funny....how I can be so late to reply to such a GREAT song! What a great twist at the end...."Hello, Destiny." Such power...in just two simple words. *sigh* I'm workin' on a song....Trying anyways! But enough about me! This song....grrr! Great! I love it. It's been stuck in my head all day! Especially since you got a melody for it. Playin' on my guitar...it's wonderful! It's goin' #1..you know it! I believe. :) Keep it up! We want more!
<br>
<br>RachN

[Megs]

Hey.
<br>Great song. I agree with Kristy..that's my fav verse too! Keep em coming. You have awsome talent!
<br>
<br>MegsN