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nelty
06-19-2000, 07:22 PM
The Mind
<br>By: Nelly Tio
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<br>Often a mind is like a desert storm
<br>The winds blowing in all forms
<br>It is bound to grieve in a perfect storm
<br>Ever pinning you down to the dirt
<br>Blasting endlessly, blinding the Sun
<br>
<br>A life is not complete without
<br>The mind, the heart and the voice
<br>The mind can be good if you let it be
<br>Voices see the mind if you let it speak
<br>The Heart helps if you let it reach
<br>
<br>The mind is a dangerous place to be
<br>It is destructive if you are reckless
<br>Like a mouse trapped in a maze
<br>Always missing the turn at every exit
<br>That is a mind without a door
<br>
<br>The heart beats like a ticking time bomb
<br>Ever waiting for the right time to blow
<br>Some may not survive the blast
<br>Those who do, are rendered helpless
<br>Their life forever changed
<br>When it didn't have to be
<br>
<br>Voices are the powerful source of self
<br>Keeping you in the right state of mind
<br>Some are strong and find the notes
<br>Some are not and finally explode
<br>Once they do, they are hard to repossess
<br>
<br>Dreams are fatal if sanctioned to control
<br>Thoughts can be deadly and damn to slay
<br>Feelings are irrelevant and kill the state of mind
<br>Senses are a weakness that commit to crimes
<br>Voices can scream but prove powerless within the mind
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<br>There is no escape in the perfect storm
<br>When the mind is in a state of confusion
<br>It will never calm and let the sun shine through
<br>As a life is never still and the voices must be heard
<br>Screams of the survivor will be saved
<br>Only when the life works as one
<br>
<br>The mind is the hope for our survival in this world
<br>Treasure the power and use it wisely, not foolishly
<br>It can bring success beyond the imagination
<br>But it can also bring endless nightmares
<br>Take it for granted and it will be taken away
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<br>what ya think???? thx.
<br>N

Pilgrim
06-20-2000, 02:26 PM
WOW
<br>
<br>I'm amazed!!! I knew you were good at this, but I didn't know you were THAT good:):):):)
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<br>VERY C:cool::cool:L
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<br>BrianN

nelty
06-20-2000, 06:31 PM
Thanks... Brian...
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<br>CC fixed it up too look good though... :-) you know the grammar part... :-) hehe
<br>
<br>NellyN

Hawk7lte
06-20-2000, 07:56 PM
Nelly it actually is very good. The depth of thought that you are striving for isn't easy to put into words; and you did it extremely well. The psychological dynamics along with the use of the storm are a plus. It sounds like you are saying that when any part of us is out of sinc or the mind out of control, beware. The mind is one of our most dangerous and most magnificent resources - use it wisely.
<br>
<br>Powerful message.
<br>
<br>
<br>Keep writing - I look forward to reading more.N

nelty
06-20-2000, 08:04 PM
Thank you Hawk... :-)
<br>
<br>and yes that is the message in the poem. :-)and I guess one other one is that you have to talk to someone before you explode. :)
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<br>I am glad that I success in making it powerful message.
<br>
<br>NellyN

RckyMtnGirl@hrt
06-21-2000, 08:26 PM
I am so glad you posted this! It is very
<br>a very powerful poem. :)
<br>
<br>Yay Nelly!
<br>
<br>CC
<br>N

RckyMtnGirl@hrt
06-21-2000, 08:29 PM
Rats! I have to learn how to use that
<br>new edit feature!
<br>
<br>CCN

nelty
06-21-2000, 08:34 PM
Thx CC... :-)
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<br>and thx for your help.. I really like this too. :-)
<br>
<br>nelly
<br>N

rightnow777
07-11-2000, 07:15 PM
AMAZING Gb would be incredibly proud of you
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<br> rightnow777N

MissScarlett
07-13-2000, 06:49 AM
Wow, Nelly! I like this poem, especially the last verse :) I knew that you wrote one poem before, but I didn't know you wrote anymore. :cool:
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<br>MargaretN

major tom
07-13-2000, 01:38 PM
Nelly the mind is truly a powerful thing. You convey that well :)
<br>
<br>KirstyN

fuzzwuzz
07-13-2000, 03:08 PM
I tell ya what though, a little bit of PEACE OF MIND goes a long way when your mind gets confused.N

nelty
07-15-2000, 05:19 AM
:cool:THANKS so much everyone. :)
<br>
<br>Margaret,
<br>
<br>I didn't know I was a writer too... LOL so that makes 2 of us.
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<br>Kristy,
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<br>that's the message that I'm trying to send so I'm glad that the message is there
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<br>Fuzz,
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<br>It's true that peace of mind come in a time of confusion but confusion can over power it, if you don't find peace in time and make use of it. Peace is there but you have to have the guts to find it and use it. Not everyone knows how to do that. That's when you lose it.
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