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Marga
09-15-2001, 02:06 PM
Listen to the wind, my honey
listen how my beats are flying away
comi' into you in silent
my thought are lost and cryin'.
Listen to the night,my love
there is no distance between us
everything it's inside my hand
from the firs moment we met
till the end of time.
This is a no way to run
only your eyes and mine there are
only a feelin' inside us
that makes happiness in our hearts.
I finally know what I feel
Ijust find what I've lost
and ther's no hell to damm love
'cause my heart would breake
but I'll still fell in love.


Hope you like this one.
I've made it just two nights ago,and i don't know if there are the perfect words in english.If it's any mistake please tell to me.

And if there is any suggestion too...:)

Marga

Triple J
09-19-2001, 08:49 AM
I loved it Marga,
it was really nice

here's a poem i wrote late one night while starin' up to the stars with hurt in my heart from my last love.


The First Time We Met


Looking at you bathed in that light,
Reminds me of that first night,
The night we first met,
You know I could never forget.

You were standing there sweet and serene,
'Till I moved over to your group to intervene,
We introduced ourselves to each other,
And the instant we began to talk I knew there was no other.

We share something I Cannot explain now,
So don't ask me to explain how,
I just know you're now my hearts desire,
'Cause we get along like a house on fire.

The time we've spent together,
Feels like it could last forever,
But now you're too far away,
And I still recall the time we had to this day.

How I long to return to you,
I'm not sure if you love me but for you I still do,
And if you look into my eyes for love,
You will see what you mean to me, my true love.

Look into your heart for me,
'Cause we are surely ment to be,
I can't hide it anymore,
You truely are the one I adore.


i dunno how good it is because i never got to read it to her. I also have some others i done while listening to Garth late at night but i love this one (god they gotta be wild poems but! :p ).

I will post more if ya'll ask me 2 :o but i feel alittle embarressed here.

have fun all
J.C.

MDgarthgirl
09-19-2001, 11:53 PM
Marga,

The poem is beautiful. Thank you for sharing. :) I saw a few spelling mistakes and kinda went through it. I hope you don't mind. I didn't change the words, excpet "fall" in the last line, cuz I thought that's what you wanted to say.

Listen to the wind, my honey
listen to how my beats are flying away
coming into you in silence
my thought are lost and cryin'.
Listen to the night, my love
there is no distance between us
everything; it's inside my hand
from the first moment we met
till the end of time.
This is a no way to run
only your eyes and mine, there are
only a feelin' inside us
that makes happiness in our hearts.
I finally know what I feel
I just find what I've lost
and there's no hell to damn love
'cause my heart would break
but I'll still fall in love.


And J.C.,

No need to feel embarrassed here at PG. We all started out NOT posting until we ...started to. LOL But you know what I mean. I promise you'll find kind words here. :) Like these: "Those are amazing sentiments from the heart. Very nice job. I'm sorry to hear it grew from painful circumstances."

Nash

littlebit
09-20-2001, 01:50 AM
Marga and J.C.,

Very moving poems ya'll. Sorry your heart got hurt JC, i'd love to hear more from both of you. :cool: ;)

Marga
09-24-2001, 06:49 AM
Nash, THANK YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO:cool:
Well I'm not such good with songs but I love to write poems, thanx for the changes.
I'm so happy you are around here another time:) .


Jesse DON'T LET NO ONE TO BROKE YOUR HEART AGAIN!
The words in that poem are just so sad!!:( but here is something to heal your heart:

Better Days
(Bekka Bramlet/Billy Burnette/Annie Roboff)

Hard times are fallin' on you
Even when you smile I see the hurt come through
And I know it feels like it's never gonna end
You say nothing's been right for a long time
And ever step you take is an uphill climb
I see you're reaching out
So let me tell you friend that

Better days are coming around
I know you feel like
The whole world's gone and let you down but
Better days are comin' for you
I know they will
'Cause I'll be right here makin' sure they do

And if your sky ain't lookin' the fairest
There ain't no reason to be embarrassed
Ain't nobody in the world ain't felt
The rain from time to time
And just when you think it's all over and done
The nights get easier one by one
So take my hand and hold on tight
And soon you're gonna find that

Better days are coming around
I know that you feel like
The whole world's gone and let you down but
Better days they're comin' for you
I know they will
'Cause I'll be right here makin' sure they do

I know what it's like
To have to face the fight
But I won't let you stand alone (oh)

Better days are comin' for you
I know it feels like
The whole world's gone and let you down but
Better days are comin' for you
I know they will
'Cause I'll be right here makin' sure they do

Oh, better days
I know, I know, I know
The whole world's gone and let you down
Better days are comin' for you
I know they will
'Cause I'll be right here makin' sure they do

Hope you feel better and please be around this forum again,
we poem's writters need the other's poems to feel better too.


Marga


:)

Triple J
09-24-2001, 12:27 PM
Marga....

those words nearly bring more then a smile to my face; they are very pirecing to me and yes i will keep my chin up and hold on for those better days.....

*smiles through misty eyes* :)

i'll try to find the courage to finish me fourth poem off, but i'm not making any garentees. I'll post the third one soon, but not just yet.(i need to build up some more courage for it, two's plenty so far)

Pilgrim
10-01-2001, 04:50 AM
Great poems:D:D:D

It's cool to see how people write in here:cool:

Brian

Marga
10-03-2001, 09:27 AM
It's cool to see how people write in here

It's cool to see how people understand poems written here.:)

Never get tired of sayin' ĦĦĦThank you!!!!

Marga:cool:

Triple J
10-03-2001, 11:23 AM
praise from Brian???

:confused: :confused: :confused:

what gives?


It's also more enjoyable to join in, why not have a go Brian?

Marg, i still feel pretty silly to be putting my thoughts out where people can see them, but i spose as you say, everyone here has such great understanding, that's why i'll keep doing it :)

Chief
10-10-2001, 11:30 PM
the_next_garth


what's your problem here? everyone have their right to express their heart. and of course not everyone can post something that is with professional standard.

not everyone is able to run without first learning to crawl then walk...


everyone started small and inexperienced...



and in return, encouragement will do them better next time. With your negative comment that you just posted, only put down their mind and causes them to feel bad about their try.


if you say so this aren't any good, then why not post a few of your "great works" that so claim others not doing a good job at trying?

:mad: