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Jeri_Rae
07-26-2001, 06:03 PM
I need some serious advice on my song.
Strong Ones By Jeri Rae Battenfield

There are some people;
Who ask for no fame;
That stay on the sidelines;
Saving other peoples lives;
In the tough times;
They are the strong ones;
Running through the long runs;
Playing the hard part;
They can be the wrong ones;
But they're the strong ones;
They play a bigger part;
Than what you see;
They do more;
Than what you know;
Lending an ear;
To cry in;
They are always here;
And we all know;
They are the strong ones;
Running through the long runs;
Playing the hard part;
They can be the wrong ones;
But they're the strong ones;
They are the people;
Who work 40 hours a week;
To make sure their family makes ends meet;
Risking their lives on the street;
Never asking ;
For a thanks;
Even though;
They are the strong ones;
Running through the long runs ;
Playing the hard part;
They can be the wrong ones;
But they're the strong ones;
Strong ones;
The strong ones.............

The end

This song is dedicated to those who help people with out one negative thought.Thank you.... we appreciate your time and love.

Vanessa
07-26-2001, 06:20 PM
This is a very well written stories, I'm not the kind of person who can give advice about songs..sorry :(

Vanessa :)

Jeri_Rae
07-26-2001, 09:17 PM
That song....lets just say...hits home.:)

MDgarthgirl
07-28-2001, 09:24 PM
I hope no one minds if I only respond to one posting of the song since it would be kinda foolish to repeat myself. lol

I'll be honest in saying I'm not a good one to give critical advise. I'm never good at that.

The poem itself has a Great message in it and it shows. It's not one you see too often.

With the right music, it might be a very strong piece. Good luck with it.

Sorry I can't give more help.

Nash

Jeri_Rae
07-28-2001, 09:34 PM
Means alot.......maybe one day I'll get music to it...