PDA

View Full Version : It'll be just fine



nelty
07-14-2001, 04:12 AM
Hey everyone...

I haven't posted here in a while and it seems a little quiet in here... Enjoy...


For all Iíve done
With all my deed
You never doubt
For what I be

Inside the dark
Beneath the heart
You never qualm
The light in me

Behind the doors
I show myself
You never know
The land I live

Outside those gates
Within the warmth
You never felt
The frost in me

With all the sham
And every smile
You never sense
The state Iím in

You never doubt
And barely note
You are the one
That must realize

Itís time for me
To leave the realm
I promise you
Itíll be just fine

Copyright 2001 NT

Nelly

littlebit
07-14-2001, 06:52 PM
Enjoyed it very much! ;)

Pilgrim
07-15-2001, 10:50 AM
That's awesome!!!!!:D:D:D:D

Brian

nelty
07-15-2001, 12:44 PM
Thanks littlebit and Brian...

Nelly

loreli
07-15-2001, 05:58 PM
You know my opinion on this

Lori

MDgarthgirl
07-20-2001, 05:12 PM
You don't know my opinion on this

So I'll tell you. ;)

It's great! I had to read it a few times to complete my interpretation of it, which let me read it differently each time. That's cool.

Nash

nelty
07-20-2001, 10:25 PM
Hey Nash...

wanna share some of your interpretation?????

Nelly

MDgarthgirl
07-20-2001, 11:20 PM
Not really.








lol..I guess, since you asked...
Hmm...how to put it into words. (I should know, huh? LOL)

I guess I see someone who's decided to leave another because no matter what they do, the other person doesn't truly see them for what they are.

But correct me if I'm wrong.

Nash

nelty
07-21-2001, 11:28 AM
Nash...

on this one, I don't think there's not a right way or a wrong way of interpreting...

Thanks

Nelly

Hawk7lte
07-22-2001, 01:01 PM
Nelly -

I read this one as a person who keeps a psychological distance from someone that they have reason to doubt or to trust.

And that other person doesn't even seem to realize it!

That seems sad to me - a "real" relationship isn't possible - and it's that underlying reality that gives the emotional strength to the poem. An attempt by someone to decrease vulnerability. I hope the barriers are as easy to take down at will - as easy as they were to put up in the beginning!

Of course that's just my interpretation. It's one of those poems that make people think. I like that!

:)
Hawk

CaptMorgan
07-22-2001, 03:36 PM
Wow Nelly!

This is very powerful and very moving.

I think that these are words that everyone is going to interpret differently depending on their own life's experiences.

Vanessa
07-22-2001, 04:24 PM
I think that these are words that everyone is going to interpret differently depending on their own life's experiences.

I've never been a "real" relationship witha guy before, so I wouldn't know this feels. :eek: :o :(

Nash, this is really really good, I can tell that you put lots of emotioninto this, great job :)

vanessa :)

nelty
07-22-2001, 04:40 PM
Thanks Hawk and Sherri...

I think this is my best one yet... Somehow, I love this one very much.

Just so everyone knows... I wasn't writing it as a relationship type situations. And I was just reading and thinking about it. "You" can be people and not just one person.

But, as mentioned, diff people look at it diff ways.

Nelly

XIXMaverickXIX
07-23-2001, 10:53 PM
Tight Tight, keep it up.

Hawk7lte
07-24-2001, 10:39 PM
Even better that way Nelly - I like that - "people" not just one person....

But then doesn't that make it even sadder not to open up and be oneself - even if that means being truly vulnerable -maybe being rejected at times - maybe fighting - and maybe walking into real love with the right person. Far better than to walk through life and not have anyone truly "know" this person the poem is about - that's not truly living to me.

Oh here I go waxing philosophical over poetry again. I'll shush now.

Blush,
Hawk

nelty
07-24-2001, 11:08 PM
Thanks XIXMaverickXIX

Hawk...

No need to blush. Feel free to "wax on" anytime you want.... I like to know what people think of my writings.

Nelly

nelty
10-12-2001, 09:44 AM
Lori...

I think you are talking about this poem. :p

Nelly

loreli
10-12-2001, 01:12 PM
LMAO No I remember this one too :p

Lori

justus
10-15-2001, 10:09 AM
Very cool Nelly!!
I love the depth...keeps you searching. I agree with Nash...it's a different interpretation every time

Paige

Triple J
10-15-2001, 10:32 AM
very cool

:cool:

well written, and very moving...


Jesse

nelty
10-15-2001, 09:44 PM
Thank you Jesse and Paige...

This one sticks out from the ones I wrote...

Nelly

Marga
10-16-2001, 05:40 AM
I feel a little of happiness around when I read it Nelly.

It'll be just fun!!


Marga:)

nelty
10-17-2001, 10:23 AM
Thanks Marge

but You lost me. This poem is really sad. I don't quite understand how you can see it as happyiness and fun????

Nelly

Marga
10-17-2001, 10:28 AM
Itís time for me
To leave the realm
I promise you
Itíll be just fine


Well girl it's happy to see you've realize that it's time for you.

Marga

nelty
10-17-2001, 10:48 AM
Marge...

the way the poem is written. I don't think you should be happy for the person in the poem to leave.

Nelly

Marga
10-17-2001, 11:07 AM
Nelly I think I'm so stupid with my english, maybe I interpreted it so so wrong.I'm so so sorry. I beg you pardon.:(

I'm going to read it another time but.

Marga:)

nelty
10-17-2001, 11:10 AM
Don't worry about it.. I was quite confused with your remarks that's all.. :)

And you are certainly not stupid... ;)

Nelly

Marga
10-17-2001, 11:24 AM
Nelly don't pay so much atention on what I wrote.

You girl have more talent than I've ever had in my little finger, and don't let no one like me say how you have to do things...:)



Marga:)

nelty
10-17-2001, 12:05 PM
LOL... ok Marge... are you talking to the same Nelly or are you refering to another Nelly??? j/k

Thanks.:)

Nely

Marga
10-17-2001, 02:03 PM
I'm talking about that lovely Nelly we have here YOU

Marga;)

Triple J
10-17-2001, 07:48 PM
Marga, you are alot smarter then most of us to be able to read and write both Spanish and English! :D

IMHO I'm terrible at writing English let alone another language :eek:

but you're very talented to know two languages, so don't ever feel bad about getting something wrong,

it's like i said before to you, the English language is the hardest language to interpret, so it's very easy to get something wrong or get confused, because even i do sometimes :o :)


Jesse

Marga
10-18-2001, 08:04 AM
Thanx for the lovely words Jesse but I don't think I'm too much talented.I would love my english was better.

Practicing is the best I do to keep it.


Marga:)

wizard2C
10-18-2001, 11:39 PM
Hi!

Nelly, great poem! I like the word you chose "realm".....it leaves the entire poem up to the reader as to what realm represents. :D

Carol
Wizard2C

--------------------------

The Children lead the way to World Peace....."Dance!Sing!Fun!2002!" :D

nelty
10-18-2001, 11:43 PM
Carol...

exactly... ;) Thanks ...

Nelly