View Full Version : My Mom :)

04-17-2001, 07:31 PM
Hey ya'll!! :)

I'm just doing this off the top of my head :) Feedback would be great!! :)

My Mom

When I look at you, I see the woman I've alwaya anted to be
Hard working, kind, generous to all,not selffish and much more

You've given me all the things in life that I could ask for and so much more
For this I thank you

You were there when I was born, haoping and praying that I would live, and yes your prayers worked because here I am standing front of you

You've given me values, hopoes, dreams,a future and most important..love

Thank you for always believing in me, when I couldn't believe in myself

I love you-always have and always will. :) You're the best!

Vanessa :)

so...how'd ya like it? :)

04-27-2001, 04:27 PM
Nice thoughts, Vanessa. :)

I'm sure your mom will love it.

Personal opinion- a little more order and rhythm to the words might make it flow better. I'm not necessarily saying every line should rhyme, or anything, though.